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Hollow part 66
- I DON’T KNOW ENGLISH VERY WELL. I JUST WANT TO IMPROVE IT.
- I’M NOT A WRITER.
- IF YOU SAW A MISTAKE, LET ME KNOW.
Description:
Are you really think that you are a master of your fate? What would you say, if I told you that you were wrong.
Akim, no longer young, but still good looking, rich man bought a new technology (machine that can cut many trees). He didn’t know that this simple decision not only will have an impact on his own life, but also change life of many others. There is also a girl. The girl, who want to discover who she really is and what is her role in this mess.
“I deserved it.” Muttered Jakow, instinctively touching his swollen cheek. “I teased her and I got what I deserved, but I didn’t think that this little girl have so much strength.”
“Jakow.” A sweet voice interrupted his reverie. Slender arms wrapped around his body and hard breast pushed against his back.
Not today. He though, sipping a glass of alcohol. Today he didn’t want to play with this nubile woman.
“Not today.” He said this time loud toward red haired woman.
“Not today?” She repeated sweetly. “Then tomorrow?”
He turned to face her and his hands clenched around her naked arms. “Tomorrow.”
“Do you promise?” She asked, intensively studding his face.
“Yes, I do.”
Her face softened and concern gave way to big smile. She leaned down and placed a kiss on his cheek. He followed her with his eyes, focusing on moves her hips, when suddenly his glance rested on an unknown man, who was sitting in the corner and watched him. Jakow rose his glass and saluting, took a big sip, draining it and then he stood from the chair.
It’s enough for today.
He headed for exit, last time looking around dark and stifling place. He decided to not come directly home. His legs took him to the boulevard. He sat down on the stone steps and stared at the river. Three years ago his life lay in ruins. When he found out that Eli had been arrested, he went to the prosecutor’s office, but the people working there didn’t want to talk to him. Unsuccessfully he tried to know about the course of affairs, until one day he had to face the cruel true. Eli was convicted and strangled in a prisoner carriage.
Eli, his Eli. This golden haired angel … Suddenly he found himself very alone. His eyes filled up with tears. He changed his position, trying to hide tears when he saw him. The man from the pub. He sat sprawled at the wooden bench and Jakow could swear that he was watching him. Concerned, he looked away.
The minutes passed and the first streetlight started to light faint light. The boulevard had become less crowded, the last rays of sun touched water sheet and the man was still sitting in the same spot. Jakow stood up, brushed his trousers and went home.
He walked slowly, stopping in front of exhibitions and beautiful shop windows. He turned once in the right, once in the left, step back, turned the sidewalk. And when he was just block away from his house, he stopped and said:
“Let’s end this game.” He turned and saw, emerging from the shadow figure. The man approached him and just millimeters separated Jakow’s face from his fist. He dodged, in the same time taking the hit in the man’s jaw. The assailant staggered back and loosing balance, fell on one knee. Jakow used this moment and grabbed his collar. His face was close to the man’s face and fist was ready to another hit.
“Who send you?” He growled, shaking him. “Who?! Talk!”
The man said not word, but his mouth curved in cynical smile. Jakow’s face crossed shadow of concern. Suddenly he felt that he loosed his breath. Someone blocked him, pressing his forearm to his throat. Jakow’s fingers clenched around arm, trying to escape from the grip. Kneeling in front of him man, stood up. He wiped blood from his face and then with all his strength he hit young man. Jakow felt taste of blood, coming out cut lip. He raised his face, giving him a glare.
“Is that all you got?”
Another hit came like a thunderbolt and then came next. Jakow slumped into ground and supported his body in his hand started cough.
“Is that all Mister?” He muttered and then he felt strong pain beside his ribs. He groaned and fell into ground, taking kicks.
“I will show you where your place is.” Said the man, reaching back and pulling a crowbar. “People who talk too much ended badly.” He raised his hand, ready for attack, when suddenly from the shadow came steely, male voice.
“Don’t move!”
The butcher lowered his hand and turned toward owner of the voice.
“Who are you?” He said, taking a step forward towards darkness.
“My name doesn’t matter.” Said the voice.
“Relax Mister, maybe we can make a deal. You look like a reasonable man.”
Suddenly rang out shot .
“What the…”
“I told you, don’t move.” Continued voice.
“You scum…”
The air rent another shot.
Jakow saw how his opponent fell into ground, squirming in pain.
The man, who kept him whispered under his breath a curse and jumping up, he ran in the opposite way.
(4.89 out of 5)
when Jakow was kicked I screamed “Nooooo my Jakow :'(!!! ”
I never realized that I was attached to him this much ^^
Thank you so much for updating Raff-san <3
Also I have a question ^^
do you write this story only from your imagination or do you get inspired by other things , like people around you or some stories you read ? I hope my question is clear because english is not my first language.
I would love to hear your advice
Also another question ( I know I'm bothering you , but please bear with me)
Are you going to do a contest soon for the people who want to have an account on otakumole ? because I have been checking your website every single day and every hour ( I really do check every hour ) but you didn't do any contest recently :'(
Thank you for everything Raff-san , I hope you read my comment ^^
With love , Sarah.
Hi
1. To be honest, I don’t have anyone in my mind
Their personalities aren’t based on any specific people who I know or historical characters. I build their characters through my imagination about Europe at the beginning of the 20th and it’s far from sweetness 😛
Of course there are some common tropes
It’s hard to avoid them, because everything has already been writing 😛
2. There is such possibility, but I can’t tell you when I will do one
Thanks for replaying <3
I'm the opposite actually . Whenever I want to write a story , I get inspired by the things I read or the movies and build the personalities based on them. But not exactly like them , I change them a little bit 😉
I'm looking forward to your next update of the story <3
And I'm waiting for your next contest.
Also, Sorry for the late replay , my WiFi suddenly stopped working X(
I was without an internet for Days </3 Thank God it got fixed :')
With love , Sarah.
Thanks for upload New part ♡
I would also like to ask what prompted you to start writing stories, because even I would like to start one and I was inspired by a manga story, so where did you realize that you could become a writer
P.S.Hoping always to be very intrusive
And sorry for my bad english but i’m italian so this isn’t my first language (^-^)
*Not to be hahahaha
Hi
To be honest I still I don’t think of myself as the author. I started to write it, because I thought that this is a good language practice and from experience I know that it is 
Really, my English is much more better – finally I can read English books not thinking too much what author said ^^ 0f course it would be better if I had someone who check my works and later explain my mistakes, but for now I don’t have such possibility 
If you thinking about writing your own story – just do it! 😀 If you are scary that someone will write bad word about your story, just ignore this person. Usually such kind of things write people who maybe read a lot and have knowledge but are very arrogant and say more than do
You plan to write light novel ?
Thanks for your answer … and anyway you are a very good writer.
I would like to follow your advice, but sometimes it’s really hard to ignore the negative comments
Anyway I would like to write for now nothing too demanding and considering that I take a lot of inspiration from shoujo manga obviously I think I write a love story between two teenagers … I really love it ♡
Thank you very much for your advice and hope that one day you will also be able to give an opinion on my story ^ – ^
Thank you for new part. I saw this now. :’) Im looking forward to next episoıde. 😀
Thanks for the upload!! Despite saying that you don’t know english very well, this is actually pretty well written! I’ve read stories on Wattpad from people who speak fluent english yet their grammar, vocabulary, and sentence structure is still an absolute mess!
So good job!!